Moriah Leila

Done and ready for more!

Hey there, I will be giving you a nitty gritty review. My corrections will be in red and my comments in bold. First of all, I found it very intriguing. ...

Hey there, yet another great chapter! Your details are vivid, the dialogue flows well, and you keep me interested throughout. My nitpicks are minor. Outside my window, the trees’ bare ...

I thought that the dialogue felt realistic and seemed to flow nicely. My only real complaint was with the ending of the story. First of all, I felt like it ...

Jo sat on the deck, her feet propped up against a barrel. They had docked the Goddess just off the coast of Cuba, careful to use the craggy outcroppings as ...

Hey, I will be reviewing this piece today. First of all, I thought it was very captivating. You're characters are obviously well developed. And your descriptions are very vivid. But ...

Hey there, I really enjoyed this piece. Is this a short story or are you going to make it into something longer? Either way, I love it. Your pace is ...

I agree with Nate, I wanted more details about the attack on the Jewish man. Could you give us more dialogue of the passengers inside the bus? And you did ...

Hi TemptedFiction, I love your user name, very creative. I have problems with the pace of my stories too. Sometimes they drag on and on, and then BAM! So much ...

Hi Zerkk, haven't formally met, but I wanted to welcome you back. I've recently returned myself, so we have that in common! I'm excited to read your stuff and if ...

Hey KJ, I know it has been awhile! I was so excited to read this. As always, it is awesome. You're soo talented, so please, don't ever stop writing. I ...

Marcus Bernard My character is an elf general. He is a male, tall, with long black hair and violet eyes. He is arrogant, stubborn, and likes to be in control ...

Just for the pure excitement of a challenge, I am going to attempt to do 100 reviews in the next 9 days. Wow, that's like 11 reviews each day. Current ...

Thanks, for the advice. I think I am going to try to write the next few chapters from different point-of-views and figure out which one works best.

I apologize for the delay in my review, my computer was on the fritz, and it took me awhile before I was able to get back on here. But my ...